Revenge (or Return) of the Vision That Did Not Know How To Be Written


Intersections and Cross-sections

the original and the re-visits

The original version

To find love

look at the street.

The act of crossing couples

is definition enough.

The Revisits

For ‘love’

look at the street

there is definition enough

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

The truth lies

at the corner

and sometimes

even before

getting that far.

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8 thoughts on “Revenge (or Return) of the Vision That Did Not Know How To Be Written

  1. Sometimes the problem with rewriting is that both versions are strong. The first version here has more definition, and I like it. The second version is tighter and more focused, and I tend to appreciate tight, focused poetry. The last five lines are magnificent.

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