Back Pocket Book Entry 21 October 3, 2011 by kjpgarcia Echo is tributary to pond beginning at each individual petal. Reflection evaporates with ripples From his name being skipped across the surface. Now, beside the water, two disembodied unrequited weep. Advertisements Spread the words:TwitterFacebookPinterestEmailGoogleTumblrRedditLike this:Like Loading... Related
“reflection evaporates with ripples from his name being skipped across the surface” Oh, how his name resounds across the waters! This poem speaks volumes. XLNT! Reply
This is one good line followed by another. Excellent write! http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/10/02/two-yearning-heart/ Reply
What a wonderful ending. http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/03/memories-and-photographs-of-you/ Reply
Oh Yes Unrequitted love is the most painful feeling to exist…. it burns you from inside while you keep on smiling… I liked your lines… ‘From his name being skipped across the surface.’ Thanks for sharing and for joining in the Poetry Picnic … Look forward to your posts on “Friends, Relationships and every one around..” next week … Shashi ॐ नमः शिवाय Om Namah Shivaya http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/10/whispers-love-and-loss-butterfly.html Reply
No, I do not currently have a chapbook but I hope to publish something soon -possibly via createspace or lulu. Reply
much motion & reflection (both water-type and 2-things-unjoinable-type like peter and his shadow) stressed in line breaks/ structure and simplicity. sudden stillness at the end really expressive/evocatively emotional. love the kind of flow you’ve achieved. nice. Reply
Gorgeous ending!
“reflection evaporates with ripples from his name being skipped across the surface” Oh, how his name resounds across the waters! This poem speaks volumes. XLNT!
Wonderful. So much in so few words.
This is one good line followed by another. Excellent write!
http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/10/02/two-yearning-heart/
Great write soo sad too. Thanks
beautiful.
What a wonderful ending.
http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/03/memories-and-photographs-of-you/
clever piece of writing.
Thanks for sharing.
I love the flow of this.
Oh Yes Unrequitted love is the most painful feeling to exist…. it burns you from inside while you keep on smiling… I liked your lines…
‘From his name
being skipped
across the surface.’
Thanks for sharing and for joining in the Poetry Picnic … Look forward to your posts on “Friends, Relationships and every one around..” next week …
Shashi
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/10/whispers-love-and-loss-butterfly.html
I love your poetry. Do you have a chapbook or…???
No, I do not currently have a chapbook but I hope to publish something soon -possibly via createspace or lulu.
Hi. I also like ‘his name being skipped across the surface’. Jane
much motion & reflection (both water-type and 2-things-unjoinable-type like peter and his shadow) stressed in line breaks/ structure and simplicity.
sudden stillness at the end really expressive/evocatively emotional.
love the kind of flow you’ve achieved.
nice.