if a good feeling was all it took
and practice made perfect
how a taste could hang around
get better
aging on tongue
in throat words used before
ask to be
autumn wind
blowing what needs to die
from stubborn trees
January 31, 2013
From Stubborn
By kjpgarcia
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January 31st, 2013 at 7:45 pm
I really liked this. But, my left brain kept asking what happened after the conditionals. It would work better for the left brained IF …. the 3rd sentnece was “how could a taste hang around” and not “:how a taste could hang around” . Thank you for the words.
February 1st, 2013 at 5:13 pm
Thanks for the reply but don’t look at the ‘if’ as a conditional and thus expecting a ‘then.’ Think of it more as casting the entirety of the poem into the subjunctive -the possible. As for the placement of ‘could,’ think of it as a modal verb. If the could was switched it would become a question. Here, the how and the could work to create a sense of more possibility/potential.
Oh, and there were supposed to spaces between the ‘lines’ creating independent stanzas. Sometimes wordpress erases my spacing between stanzas but I fixed it.
February 2nd, 2013 at 7:58 am
Damn stubborn trees! I enjoy your work. Thx for sharing.